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Be Careful When You Close the Window!
There was a huge crash! Why? I swore I would
never tell anyone. What's that? You'll pay me? Okay! Here it goes, but you
can't tell anyone, ever!
Landon
and I had been hanging out all Saturday. I had decided I would spend even more
time with him and spend the night. We went straight down to the basement with a
huge bowl of popcorn and a case of Doctor Pepper. We had been watching movies
for hours. I think we ended up watching Four. By then it was already midnight,
witch didn’t seem that late, se we decided to pull an all nighter. With
caffeine and food, how hard could it be? At around two in the morning, we had
finished all of our movies and resorted to playing board games we found in the
back.
I
had never been this tired and bored ever. It was going to be a hard night if we
didn't do something, and fast!
“What
do you wann do?” he would ask.
“I
don’t know!” was the usual respons.
When
I had talked about what we wanted to do, an idea came to mind to go down the
street and run around with his neighbor who had been texting us all night.
“Text
him first, otherwise we might be even more bored outside.” I reminded Landon.
We
ran the idea past him and he was cool with sneaking out too, we decided to meet
him near the neighborhood pool. Now was the hard part, getting out of the house
without waking Landon's parents.
Now this is where you might laugh at us. Do
you swear you won't tell anyone? Okay, pinky promise!
Since
we couldn't go upstairs, we had to find a way out of the house without leaving
the basement. Then I had the brilliant idea of climbing out the window.
“Why
don’t we just get something to climb out of the window with,” I questioned
“seems easy enough?”
We
had gotten the stepstool from the storage room and decided it was time to go.
We texted Landon's neighbor and told him we would be there in 10 minutes. I said
I would go first because I knew Landon was going to take a long time.
You know how there's an indent next to the
basement windows and there's a plastic cover over the indent? Yeah?
Landon told me
“Just get out into the little indent and then maybe it will be easier for you
to just stand up and get out of there.”
This
was a mistake, because I got in a position where I couldn't really move very
well.
“I
AM STUCK!” I said with a very stressed out voice.
This
meant that I couldn't move my arms and legs to get the plastic cover off of and
then, because of this, Landon had to get a pool stick and force it open so I
could stand up and get out. It was then when we thought we were home free. Something
went terribly wrong.
Landon
insisted on closing the window, I thought it was unnecessary because no one was
awake and we were going to come right back.
“It
wont budge, its stuck!” He explained
“What
do you mean it is stuck, it’s a window how hard could it be to close?” I spoke
too early.
He
tried closing it several times, but it wouldn’t budge, he ended up unhooking it
and not being able to hold it very well. He then dropped it. That is when it
all went wrong!
The
window crashed into the stool below us, it sounded like it could have come from
a horror movie, when an intruder breaks a window to rob the house. The sound
kept replaying in my head over and over again, the crack of the glass, the thud
of the stool, and even our gasps all replaying in my head. My heart sank, I
could feel the pounding on my chest, almost lie I am at a rock concert sitting
next to a speaker. Both of us stared at each other. It was terrible. We had no
idea what to do, until his parent’s bedroom light turned on. This is when I
started to panic, my mind was racing.
“What
if they think someone kidnapped us? They wont see us there and the window is
missing and broken all over the place!” I jumped to conclusion.
We
ran around to the front door and rang the doorbell over and over again.
Landon's Dad answered the door very confused is why we were outside. We
explained that the window had broken as Landon climbed out of the window, he
was very disappointed and told us that we had to clean up and I won't be in
trouble as long as we could get the replacement window in and cleaned up
without any help.
“Wow
landon if that was my dad we would both be dead right now!” I explained
“Oh
don’t worry I will be dead as soon as you leave tomorrow morning.” He said with
a melancholy face.
As
you can imagine, for two teenagers who had no idea how to clean up glass, this
was going to be a challenge we had started with vacuuming up the glass and
picking up millions of pieces. We also had to put the new window in, and this
was the challenge. We had to retry three times, and we had finally gotten it
right.
When
we finish the window and finish cleaning, that we sat down just to take a quick
break this break ended up being a 10 hour sleep we were tired it was 6 AM when
we fell asleep and about Four when we woke up . We were both surprised how well
we cleaned up and put the window in, and will never be that carless when we
close a window again.
We didn't get in much trouble, except his
dad being disappointed in us. The one lesson that we learned throughout this
whole experience was don't sneak out especially if you do be careful when you close the window.
Reflection-
I believe that throughout the course of my Ill advised moment i did many thing well. I believe i connected with my reader in many creative ways, I also think i used my five senses in come very creative ways too. I also think that I used dialogue in different ways and in many points throughout my story. I also think my story was written in a very creative way making my reader want to read more. o

I really love the plot of this story! I thought that the dialogue was great, especially that part when the window first gets stuck. I also like the imagery you used, specifically when you heard the sound of broken glass, and compared it to being at a rock concert. I could really imagine the sound of the window breaking and how your heart must've stopped. Great job Logan!
ReplyDeleteI liked how the story was told. During your reflection you did a good job of explaining what happened.
ReplyDeleteI like how you gave in-depth detals
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